What do you think of my poem?

I have two questions really, where can I publish my poems online, and what do you think of the following poem?

I'm over the hill, hair going grey

still young at heart, but thats what they all say.

I'm over the hill, going down the pan

feels quite depressing, I can't believe it man!

It woudn't be so bad, if I had done the things I wished

woundn't be so sad, if I had seen the things I've missed.

Theres hope for me still, but its a long shot

you know what you got, when your over the hill.

But as long as I have mind, then I still have will

and thats what will keep me going

right over this hill.

What do you think of my poem?

Dye your hair Blonde

Dont go over the hill

If you do this

You wont feel so ill

Don't be depressed of things that you have missed

You still have time to for fill your wish

Life is to short

Life should not be dull

So enjoy your life and have some fun

Surf in Hawaii and take in the sun.

Come back refreshed and full of Life

Smile and be happy

and enjoy the rest of your life

What do you think of my poem?

cheesy

What do you think of my poem?

That is lovely!!!

What do you think of my poem?

I like your poem . My mother in-law is a published poet and I have a friend who has her own website with all her poems on . It's a really good website .

http://www.chrissypops.co.uk/Index.htm#S...

Check it out and post her the question . She will definitely know . Good luck . :)

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Smashing!

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yeah.....it did not make sense

`Would not be so sad , if I had seen the things I have missed`

How can you know you have missed them, or should be sad to miss them, if you have not seen them??????

Also absolutely nothing new or of any substance for a reader to find in `your work`

My opinion, start again. If you are so old, you should have lots of interesting experience to draw on. Make it worth reading!

What do you think of my poem?

nice poem, but you need to get in your car and see the things you want to see. There's a song out there called 100 years, basically it says that we'll be gone before we get to do things we always wanted to. As for me I'm going to Hawaii and Europe. We only go around once, remember that

What do you think of my poem?

I'm over the hill, going down the pan

feels quite depressing, --I can't believe..--

It woudn't be so bad, --things I wished, drag me down.--

woundn't be so sad, if I had seen the things I've missed.

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I think that looks better,

Not every line in a poem has to rhyme, just tso long as each line sounds as meaningful and the one that proceeds it.

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You never learned that in your long lifetime? ^^-

That last line in the first paragraph is very good, and -not -because it rhymes.

What do you think of my poem?

It rhymes, but does not scan. The spelling, punctuation and grammar are poor. Poems are short, every word should count and be spelled properly.

It starts off like a classic sonnet, but stops at 11 lines. Either use form or don't, but this looks lopsided, as if you couldn't be bothered.

Although I am a published poet, I've only ever been published in books and poetry magazines, but I know there are poetry website which will publish anything - just google around.

I know you'll hate me now, but may I make a suggestion ? Before you write any more poetry, try reading some first. Read good current poets like Simon Armitage and Carol Ann Duffy. What other art form would you practice without first seeing what others are doing ?

What do you think of my poem?

Heaven sent, eh! (think about it). Looks heartfelt, but it's still doggerel. Hint: study the 19th century famous poets, and the best-known of the 20th century, then start again. This is advice given me a few years ago: I pass it on as very well worthwhile, perhaps to stand on shoulders eventually. Best wishes!

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If i were u i wouldn't ask if the poem was good. it is the best poem i ever heard u have inspiered me to take up poety. thank you.

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it definately is a long shot, try free verse? your lines are decapicated by a clogging rhyme

What do you think of my poem?

I`ve read you poem, sometimes it rhymes, sometimes it doesn`t, and most time it does not scan.

The cadence is all wrong.

If you want an honest answer from one who has written many poems in the past years, and had published several times, sometimes for money, sometimes quoted over radio and television - it was rubbish.

And that was being kind.

If you take notice of others who were nice about it, you will continue to write rubbish and not get any better.